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Abstract: Spacecraft thermal control systems is are essential to provide the necessary environment for the crew and equipment to function adequately on space missions. The Ultralight Fabric Reflux Tube (UFRT) was developed[when??] by Pacific Northwest Laboratory (PNL) as a lightweight radiator concept [to be] used on planetary-type missions (e.g., Moon, Mars). The UFRT [consists of] is constructed of a thin-walled tube (acting as the fluid boundary), overwrapped with a low-mass ceramic fabric (acting as the primary pressure boundary). [A more detailed explanation of Fabric Reflux Tube may be needed here] The tubes are being in a similar fashion placed in an array in the vertical position with the evaporators at the lower end. Heat is added [to the] evaporators, which vaporizes the working fluid. The vapor travels to the condenser end above and cools as heat is radiated to the environment. The fluid condensed on the tube wall is then returned to the evaporator by gravity.[Needs a more detailed elaboration for an engineering specification] The primary objectives for the fiscal year 1994 program included the design and fabrication of prototype UFRTs and thermal/vacuum chamber testing of these test articles.[Perhaps objectives for fiscal year 1995 or 1993 should be considered here as well.]

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